Re: The flagon with the dragon has the brew that explodes

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In ideal conditions I would never employ the phrase "woefully underprepared".


Posted by: ben w-lfs-n | Link to this comment | 08-18-06 5:31 AM
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you should probably delete "affords".


Posted by: mcmc | Link to this comment | 08-18-06 5:49 AM
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You're right, of course, but then the sentence would be missing a verb. I could delete "affords" and change "that" to "in", I guess.


Posted by: ben w-lfs-n | Link to this comment | 08-18-06 5:53 AM
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Or, you could change "that" to "in" and retain "affords".


Posted by: Clownæsthesiologist | Link to this comment | 08-18-06 5:56 AM
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-- If you subsequently deleted "an", we could read the sentence as if "affords" meant "surroundings".


Posted by: Clownæsthesiologist | Link to this comment | 08-18-06 5:57 AM
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I could do what you describe in 4, true, but it would lead to the sentence making no sense.


Posted by: ben w-lfs-n | Link to this comment | 08-18-06 6:03 AM
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Not that anybody would notice.


Posted by: apostropher | Link to this comment | 08-18-06 6:10 AM
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6 -- good point.


Posted by: Clownæsthesiologist | Link to this comment | 08-18-06 6:14 AM
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I have had it with these motherfucking chemists on this motherfucking plane!

(I'm so, so sorry.)


Posted by: Armsmasher | Link to this comment | 08-18-06 6:36 AM
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"The Terrorists Who Couldn't Bomb Right," script by David Sedaris, directed by the Zucker bros


Posted by: Adam Ash | Link to this comment | 08-18-06 6:47 AM
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It's OK, 'smasher. You said it so that nobody else would have to.


Posted by: OneFatEnglishman | Link to this comment | 08-18-06 7:09 AM
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But w-lfs-n, where is the pellet with the poison?


Posted by: Jackmormon | Link to this comment | 08-18-06 7:11 AM
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12 -- the poison is stored in sprinkles, not pellets.


Posted by: Clownæsthesiologist | Link to this comment | 08-18-06 7:13 AM
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Is the Ealing comedy "The Mouse That Roared", and if so, has it been remade?


Posted by: DonBoy | Link to this comment | 08-18-06 7:18 AM
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I would like to see an entire thread consisting of discussion of the grammar and possible rewordings of the text of the post, without ever discussing the substance of the post. This one looked promising, but alas, we have sunk to discussing content.


Posted by: My Alter Ego | Link to this comment | 08-18-06 7:24 AM
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15: "consisting of discussion of" s/b "discussing" or "devoted to"


Posted by: text | Link to this comment | 08-18-06 7:32 AM
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Do we like the way "the text of the post" is echoed by "the substance of the post"? Would it be better as "the text of the post . . . the post's substance"?

I could go either way.


Posted by: Felix | Link to this comment | 08-18-06 7:36 AM
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I might change "text of the post" simply to "post," and change "substance of the post" to "its substance."


Posted by: text | Link to this comment | 08-18-06 7:53 AM
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Once you start talking about the substance of the post, you might as well use compound nouns.


Posted by: Jackmormon | Link to this comment | 08-18-06 7:53 AM
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I'd be much more concerned about poison gas than explosions- see that Japanese cult and Andrew Sullivan's recent fantasy. It's much easier to conceal poison emitting materials compared to explosives (since explosives tend to be reactive) and there's no test in place for them.


Posted by: SP | Link to this comment | 08-18-06 7:55 AM
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I think I might move "simply" to between "might" and "change," and remove the second "change."


Posted by: Felix | Link to this comment | 08-18-06 7:55 AM
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The Ealing comedy is "The Ladykillers", you petty, jealous, economically illiterate bitches.


Posted by: Cryptic Ned | Link to this comment | 08-18-06 7:55 AM
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21 to 18.


Posted by: Felix | Link to this comment | 08-18-06 7:56 AM
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21: I would delete "I think."


Posted by: text | Link to this comment | 08-18-06 7:58 AM
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24:

Truly this thread is like a refiner's fire.


Posted by: Felix | Link to this comment | 08-18-06 8:00 AM
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I was a fan of the post-substance but looking for niggling errors in the post-text and comments-text is an appealing notion.

In related news, I have added "The Court Jester" to my NetFlix queue.


Posted by: Clownæsthesiologist | Link to this comment | 08-18-06 8:01 AM
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But w-lfs-n, where is the pellet with the poison?

I already said in the post that I don't know anything about Ealing comedies, so how would I know? I'd check the chalice from the palace, though, or maybe the washbasin.


Posted by: ben w-lfs-n | Link to this comment | 08-18-06 8:33 AM
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26: "related" s/b "unrelated"


Posted by: text | Link to this comment | 08-18-06 8:36 AM
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Ben, this all sounds extremely plausible to me, but it won't be an American movie. It'll almost certainly be made in France, starring Gerard Depardieu or another prominent Gallic clown. And it'll have a title like My Nephew, the Terrorist.

I can't wait for the LGF thread.


Posted by: tom | Link to this comment | 08-18-06 8:48 AM
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I believe a movie that fits this description was released about six months ago, although it was preordained by its studio as a flop (in Pittsburgh, it played for about two weeks in two theaters) despite its many stars.


Posted by: Cryptic Ned | Link to this comment | 08-18-06 8:55 AM
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28: I know, I feel that way too.


Posted by: text's mom | Link to this comment | 08-18-06 8:56 AM
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31: "I know, I feel that way too" s/b "I love my son".


Posted by: text | Link to this comment | 08-18-06 9:02 AM
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"I love my son"

You're not married, right?


Posted by: apostropher | Link to this comment | 08-18-06 9:11 AM
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We are all pawns in the slow erosion of our privacy rights.


Posted by: text | Link to this comment | 08-18-06 9:18 AM
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30.--I like w-lfs-n's idea that it should be a sitcom, rather than a movie. I'm imagining something with the recurring futility of "The Prisoner" and the grandiose slapstick of "Pinky and the Brain."


Posted by: Jackmormon | Link to this comment | 08-18-06 9:20 AM
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With a dash of "Hogan's Heroes"


Posted by: Clownæsthesiologist | Link to this comment | 08-18-06 9:24 AM
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s/that/but/ in 25, I think; my idea was that it would be a movie. I think it would be hard to pull it off as a sitcom, because sitcoms, as a rule, suck, and part of my idea is that this would not suck, just be in poor taste.


Posted by: ben w-lfs-n | Link to this comment | 08-18-06 9:24 AM
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I like tom's 29. Written by BHL? But the French would resist the appositive and parenthecize instead: My Nephew (Terrorist)


Posted by: Armsmasher | Link to this comment | 08-18-06 9:25 AM
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"I love my son" s/b "I love my dead gay son"


Posted by: Becks | Link to this comment | 08-18-06 9:28 AM
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re: 38

Terrorist(e), surely.


Posted by: nattarGcM ttaM | Link to this comment | 08-18-06 9:30 AM
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Ah, my mistake. Well, I think it should be a sitcom. A shortlived sitcom, probably.


Posted by: Jackmormon | Link to this comment | 08-18-06 9:30 AM
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29: That movie has also been made. With the Depardieu role being played by India's answer to Depardieu.


Posted by: Cryptic Ned | Link to this comment | 08-18-06 9:32 AM
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1-6: all annoying. The obvious solution is to change "that" to "of," which makes "imagine" the verb.


Posted by: bitchphd | Link to this comment | 08-18-06 9:37 AM
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B, that does exactly the same thing, with a different word, as what I proposed in 3. (Technically "imagine" is already a verb? Changing "that" to "in" or "of" changes the nature of the clause.)


Posted by: ben w-lfs-n | Link to this comment | 08-18-06 9:43 AM
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Also, airplane restrooms aren't circular. It wouldn't be an efficient use of space.


Posted by: Felix | Link to this comment | 08-18-06 9:47 AM
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Straitened circuit, then.


Posted by: ben w-lfs-n | Link to this comment | 08-18-06 9:49 AM
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44: You're right about three. But your parenthetical is beside the point: I didn't say it made "imagine" a verb, I said it made it the verb, which is to say, the predicate of the sentence. So nyah.

(I throw the nyah in just to please Ogged, if he's hanging out.)


Posted by: bitchphd | Link to this comment | 08-18-06 9:49 AM
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39: Wonder how she'd react if her son had a limp wrist with a pulse.


Posted by: text | Link to this comment | 08-18-06 9:50 AM
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43: I would say the same, now that I've taken the time to read it more carefully. You'd still have to delete "affords". And you can't play if you're going to call us names.


Posted by: mcmc | Link to this comment | 08-18-06 9:50 AM
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47: "nyah" s/b "neener, neener".


Posted by: text | Link to this comment | 08-18-06 9:52 AM
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Deleting affords goes without saying, since we started with the statement that "affords" is a weak verb.

So there.


Posted by: bitchphd | Link to this comment | 08-18-06 10:25 AM
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You gaylords go on thinking about grammar, but I can't help wonder, how awesome--and how very much in the interest of national security--would it be if, in airplane bathrooms, you strapped yourself into a harness, pushed a button, and were just hung outside the plane to do your business?


Posted by: ogged | Link to this comment | 08-18-06 10:38 AM
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Harnesses are for fags. Real men hang on to the wings with their teeth.


Posted by: Felix | Link to this comment | 08-18-06 10:44 AM
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52: There's a similar setup in Fluke, but instead of being dangled out of an airplane, you're squeezed halfway out a whale rectum, then sucked back in.


Posted by: apostropher | Link to this comment | 08-18-06 10:46 AM
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I just read that. Peculiar.


Posted by: LizardBreath | Link to this comment | 08-18-06 10:50 AM
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'Twould be quite a trial for the pee-shy. And it would make it even more difficult to change a baby in the restroom rather than on the fold-down tray at your seat.

I suppose the answer for that is that people shouldn't bring babies on planes in the first place.


Posted by: bitchphd | Link to this comment | 08-18-06 10:55 AM
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or we should become accustomed to the changing of babies on the fold-down tray. It's not as bad as sitting next to an incessant farter.


Posted by: text | Link to this comment | 08-18-06 11:06 AM
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