Re: Lament

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Now do a limerick.


Posted by: strasmangelo jones | Link to this comment | 06-20-07 1:57 PM
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Is Becks the official "Ask the Mineshaft" Person? I ask, because I have a personal bleg. My question is Boston specific, but I think it speaks to a larger problem with big-box stores. When Home Depot doesn't have what you want, where can you go?

Where can you get help with paint or find more interesting mouldings/trim?


Posted by: Bostoniangirl | Link to this comment | 06-20-07 2:02 PM
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Ogged, I like it when you're so transparent.


Posted by: slolernr | Link to this comment | 06-20-07 2:07 PM
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There was a young man from Iraq
With a hairy great scar on his sack
When he swam on his front
It looked like a cunt
Or an arse, if he swam on his back.


Posted by: dsquared | Link to this comment | 06-20-07 2:35 PM
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ogged is going to be pissed to be called an Iraqi.


Posted by: Jackmormon | Link to this comment | 06-20-07 2:44 PM
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So true, JM.


Posted by: Bostoniangirl | Link to this comment | 06-20-07 2:45 PM
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Your day job is secure, one hopes?


Posted by: M/tch M/lls | Link to this comment | 06-20-07 2:46 PM
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5/6: better this then:

there once was a mexican lad
with a gairy great scar on his 'nads
...


Posted by: soubzriquet | Link to this comment | 06-20-07 2:47 PM
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erm, `hairy', even


Posted by: soubzriquet | Link to this comment | 06-20-07 2:47 PM
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There was a young swimmer who pined
For the ladies at swimming, so fine
But when talking, he choked
Not e'en his breaststroke
Could induce the young lifeguard to dine


Posted by: Megan | Link to this comment | 06-20-07 2:50 PM
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10: or

There once was a Persian named ogged
Who could float on his back like a log
But his efforts to woo
With a breaststroke or two
Left him pining, alone, with his blog.


Posted by: soubzriquet | Link to this comment | 06-20-07 2:55 PM
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What? No "fuck you, Clown" incorporated into a swimming poem?


Posted by: will | Link to this comment | 06-20-07 2:55 PM
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11: Nice.


Posted by: DaveL | Link to this comment | 06-20-07 3:01 PM
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There once was a lifeguard quite young
From whom ogged sought a lunchtime of fun
She said yes right away
But then to ogged's dismay
Upon meeting, replied, "oops, wrong one."


Posted by: Rousseau | Link to this comment | 06-20-07 3:10 PM
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You people just can't let go of the past, can you?


Posted by: ogged | Link to this comment | 06-20-07 3:19 PM
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15: not when it's fun like that. don't be ridiculous.


Posted by: soubzriquet | Link to this comment | 06-20-07 3:21 PM
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12 is correct.

What am I, when strangers sing back,
'Nice and long?' -- 'Fuck you, clowns.'


Posted by: arthegall | Link to this comment | 06-20-07 3:23 PM
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#11 is current. Do you want me to update mine?


Posted by: Megan | Link to this comment | 06-20-07 3:25 PM
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Comments on these sorts of posts only encourage him to post more of them. Econ 101 isn't always wrong.


Posted by: SomeCallMeTim | Link to this comment | 06-20-07 3:32 PM
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18

yes please.


Posted by: will | Link to this comment | 06-20-07 3:32 PM
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He swam by himself every day
Yearning for someone to say
Nice and long, I like that
Where have you been at?
Your breaststroke and you should come play.


Posted by: Megan | Link to this comment | 06-20-07 3:35 PM
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Engineers write such wonderful poetry. Especially when they've been to law school.


Posted by: DaveL | Link to this comment | 06-20-07 3:37 PM
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I'm so misunderstood.


Posted by: ogged | Link to this comment | 06-20-07 3:37 PM
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what? you thought you wouldn't have to suffer for your art, ogged?


Posted by: soubzriquet | Link to this comment | 06-20-07 3:38 PM
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True enough, true enough. Let history be my judge.


Posted by: ogged | Link to this comment | 06-20-07 3:43 PM
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Nobody understands him as well
As his mother who thinks he is swell
He just wants some romance
Without taking a chance
Now he wish Unfogged he did not tell


Posted by: will | Link to this comment | 06-20-07 3:44 PM
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Ogged went on his blog and he whined:
Your limericks are cruel and unkind.
I'm so misunderstood.
Sure, I'm sporting big wood
But I want to be loved for my mind."


Posted by: Megan | Link to this comment | 06-20-07 3:45 PM
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21: 'Your breaststroke and you should come play.' s/b 'And he never let on he was gay.'


Posted by: Jesus McQueen | Link to this comment | 06-20-07 3:50 PM
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Sestinas may break my bones, but limericks will never hurt me.


Posted by: ogged | Link to this comment | 06-20-07 3:51 PM
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All hail Megan.

Chorus:
hail, hail


Posted by: Alyce | Link to this comment | 06-20-07 3:53 PM
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It isn't the limericks that hurt
It's the fact that the girls never flirt
When I swim at the pool
They just think I'm a tool
Or maybe some aged pervert.


Posted by: Megan | Link to this comment | 06-20-07 4:02 PM
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Who knew Megan had so much poetry in her soul?


Posted by: ogged | Link to this comment | 06-20-07 4:06 PM
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Though it can't possibly do any good
And he knew there's no chance that it would
Said our hero named ogged
In a post at unfogged
Oh why am I misunderstood?


Posted by: soubzriquet | Link to this comment | 06-20-07 4:11 PM
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I did! I did! (22)


Posted by: DaveL | Link to this comment | 06-20-07 4:11 PM
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34 to 32.


Posted by: DaveL | Link to this comment | 06-20-07 4:11 PM
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like beauty that cloaks
What in those eyes it defines?

This makes no sense.


Posted by: bitchphd | Link to this comment | 06-20-07 4:18 PM
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All bow down to Megan. 31 wins.

There isnt a Fuck you, Clown, but it is still excellent.


Posted by: will | Link to this comment | 06-20-07 4:25 PM
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I don't really have poetry in my soul. But I have a deep and fervent need for trashtalking. It'll find any outlet, I guess.


Posted by: Megan | Link to this comment | 06-20-07 4:32 PM
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26: I never knew "Unfogged" was accented on the third syllable.


Posted by: Cryptic Ned | Link to this comment | 06-20-07 4:36 PM
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The Ogged

swims
without fins.
Of the slim tanned lifeguard-girls, one stands
her golden hand
opening and shutting itself like

an
injured fan.
The loogies that float at the side
of the pool, cannot hide
there for the submerged filters in the

pool,
silent as
glass, pull the spit with spotlight swiftness
into their crevices--
in they go, chlorine protecting

the
swimmer's health
-y body. The water splits, a wedge
of iron through the glass surface
of the pool; whereupon the free

style
swimmer, the
breast-stroking frog, the dolphin-kicking
butterfly, even
backstrokers, slide past each other.

All
external
scars of mortality show on their
defiant carcasses--
all the physical features of

ac-
cident--lack
of kidney, surgeon's grooves, dimpled ass
or hairy backs, these things
mar them; the athlete has cheated

death.
Repeated
evidence has proved that he can live
though he can not revive
his youth. He grows old in the pool.


Posted by: bitchphd | Link to this comment | 06-20-07 4:46 PM
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Holy shit, 31 is just perfect. She keeps showing new skills.


Posted by: marcus | Link to this comment | 06-20-07 4:55 PM
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You chicks have a lot of latent hostility, don't you? This is because I won't sleep with you, isn't it? You're all going to try to sex me up at the meetup, aren't you?


Posted by: ogged | Link to this comment | 06-20-07 4:55 PM
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These are all amazing. I like 27, and 40, particularly.


Posted by: LizardBreath | Link to this comment | 06-20-07 4:59 PM
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Rewriting Marianne Moore is *hostile*? Jesus, and people think I'm high-maintenance.


Posted by: bitchphd | Link to this comment | 06-20-07 4:59 PM
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I

Among twenty floating swimmers,
The only moving thing
Was the kick of the breaststroke.

II

I was of slow times,
Like a set
In which there are three breaststrokes.

III

The breastroke swirled in the waterway.
It was a small part of the fantasy.

IV

A man and a woman
Are one.
A man and a woman and a breaststroke
Are one.

V

I do not know which to prefer,
The beauty of swim coaches
Or the beuaty of lifeguards,
The breaststroke kicking
Or just after.

VI

Kickboards filled the long course pool
With synthetic foam.
The wave form of the breaststroke
Crossed it, to and fro.
The mood
Traced in the wave form
An indecipherable flirt.

VII

O thin man of Iran,
Why do you imagine online dates?
Do you not see how the breaststroke
Wraps around the minds
Of the women about you?

VIII

I know noble freestyle
And backstroke, and the butterfly rhythms;
But I know, too,
That the breaststroke is involved
In what I know.

IX

When the breaststroke swam out of sight,
It marked the edge
Of one of many pools.

X

At the sight of breaststroke
Swum with a crawl kick
Even the fans of Kitajima
Would cry out sharply.

XI

He swam over the Pacific
Near a glass boat.
Once, a fear pierced him,
In that he mistook
The shadow of his butterfly
For breaststroke.

XII

The river is flooding.
The breaststroke must be tiring.

XIII

I was swimming all afternoon.
I was flirting
And I was going to flirt.
The breaststroke showed
Off my body's limbs.


Posted by: eb | Link to this comment | 06-20-07 5:02 PM
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The comma in the second sentence of 44 is unnecessary.


Posted by: DaveL | Link to this comment | 06-20-07 5:02 PM
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Now 45 is awesome.


Posted by: ogged | Link to this comment | 06-20-07 5:04 PM
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45 made me laugh.


Posted by: slolernr | Link to this comment | 06-20-07 5:05 PM
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Bravo, eb.


Posted by: Standpipe Bridgeplate | Link to this comment | 06-20-07 5:05 PM
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Ogged went to the meetup afraid
That this was the day he'd get laid
By Bitch P h. D
And little old me
And Unfogged would not come to his aid.


Posted by: Megan | Link to this comment | 06-20-07 5:06 PM
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Unfogged threads swim
Late spring and oggeds lament
Oh fuck you, Clown


Posted by: bash who? | Link to this comment | 06-20-07 5:11 PM
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Complacencies of the clear CT, and late
Chlorine and snot in a sunny pool
And the blonde freedom of a lifeguard
Upon a high chair mingle to dissipate
The holy hush of an ancient sacrifice.
He dreams a little, and he feels the dark
Encroachment of that old catastrophe
As a calm darkens among water-lights.
The shapely breasts and bright, blue balls
Seem things in some procession of the dead,
Winding across wide water, without sound.
The blog is like wide water, without sound.
Stilled for the passing of his hopes of love
Over the seas, to silent Persia
Dominion of the maternal matchmaker.


Posted by: DaveL | Link to this comment | 06-20-07 5:14 PM
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You people suck. I read Moore and then 40 to PK, and he said "that's kind of like copying the other poem, only funny. and about a pool."


Posted by: bitchphd | Link to this comment | 06-20-07 5:15 PM
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53: and this makes us suck how?


Posted by: soubzriquet | Link to this comment | 06-20-07 5:19 PM
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Maybe we should take a collection and hire Ogged a high-quality, blonde, voluntary, untrafficked sex object for the meetup. Working her way through law school, for example.


Posted by: John Emerson | Link to this comment | 06-20-07 5:21 PM
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Your scansion's more than a little shaky, ogged.


Posted by: ben w-lfs-n | Link to this comment | 06-20-07 5:23 PM
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I didn't try to make it scan, my hidebound young friend.


Posted by: ogged | Link to this comment | 06-20-07 5:24 PM
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54: The sucking is unrelated. B just has to periodically insult us, otherwise she just doesn't feel right.


Posted by: rob helpy-chalk | Link to this comment | 06-20-07 5:24 PM
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Nonsense. A six-year old appreciates literary wit more than all you brainiacs.


Posted by: bitchphd | Link to this comment | 06-20-07 5:39 PM
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On the other hand, you all probably DON'T YELL IF SOMEONE TRIES TO HELP YOU WASH YOUR HAIR.


Posted by: bitchphd | Link to this comment | 06-20-07 5:39 PM
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You're probably gouging his scalp with your bitch fingernails. My sainted mom did that too. It took decades for me to heal.


Posted by: John Emerson | Link to this comment | 06-20-07 5:42 PM
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I am not. I'm just trying to make sure he washes the top of his fucking head and rinses all the damn shampoo out.


Posted by: bitchphd | Link to this comment | 06-20-07 5:44 PM
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Most of us don't have hair on our fucking head, especially at 6. Maybe that's the problem?


Posted by: DaveL | Link to this comment | 06-20-07 5:45 PM
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You don't really expect sympathy for the hassle of dealing with your gay hippie child's butt-length hair, do you?


Posted by: ogged | Link to this comment | 06-20-07 5:47 PM
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Don't lie, B. Now he'll never trust you again. You might as well just get him his own personal full-time therapist right now. Shouldn't cost you more than fifty thou a year if you shop around.


Posted by: John Emerson | Link to this comment | 06-20-07 5:47 PM
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60. Wait, I thought it was fun. You're saying you needed a cookie?


Posted by: soubzriquet | Link to this comment | 06-20-07 5:48 PM
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I'm calling the cops on DaveL.


Posted by: bitchphd | Link to this comment | 06-20-07 5:48 PM
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And I'm bringing PK to the meetup and sic him on Ogged.


Posted by: bitchphd | Link to this comment | 06-20-07 5:50 PM
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47-49: Thanks.


Posted by: eb | Link to this comment | 06-20-07 5:54 PM
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67: They don't have hair on their fucking heads either. A lot of them don't even have hair on the heads on top of their necks.


Posted by: DaveL | Link to this comment | 06-20-07 5:56 PM
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Maybe I never healed. maybe that's why I'm the way I am. I bet McManu's Mom was a gouger too.


Posted by: John Emerson | Link to this comment | 06-20-07 6:06 PM
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Sexist.


Posted by: bitchphd | Link to this comment | 06-20-07 6:08 PM
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Most problems are caused by bad moms.

My mom was a good mom, but you know, she gouged my scalp.


Posted by: John Emerson | Link to this comment | 06-20-07 6:54 PM
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Ogged the Persian, a year single,
Forgot the appeal of lifeguards, and Swedes
And neglected to floss.
A well-publicised tumor
Ravaged his discarded kidney. As he rose and fell
He passes the stages of his age and youth
Entering the whirlpool.
Gentile or Jew
O you who turn the wheel and hit "Refresh",
Consider Ogged, who was once handsome and tall as you.


Posted by: ajay | Link to this comment | 06-21-07 7:26 AM
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Or maybe some aged pervert.

Ogged really ought to bear Megan's child.

I was going to mention how much I liked 40, but this made it just about impossible.


Posted by: cw | Link to this comment | 06-21-07 9:05 AM
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Ogged dreams of Swedish girls who teach breaststrokes,
Whatever those are,
As a tutor teaches them how to execute
Sixteen swimming positions in the pool;
This makes him join the swim club,
Jive at the Mineshaft, flirt, and
On Thursdays comment about girly triceps
At 6am.

Such uncorrected visions end in jokes,
Or stories,
Told on blogs by old-timers to recent
N00bs; his distant mum; having to scheme
With money; email; age. So ultimate
Fruit baskets are bestowed, when old Ogged sits and dreams
Of naked Swedish girls who teach breaststrokes,
Whatever those are.


Posted by: arthegall | Link to this comment | 06-21-07 9:06 PM
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"them" s/b "him," fuck.


Posted by: arthegall | Link to this comment | 06-21-07 9:10 PM
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